WIP Wednesday

While I've been sticking pretty well to the writing every night plan, right now most of my time has been taken up with the Steampunk story as it is due for creative writing class sometime next week. The problem is, I'm trying to keep the page numbers under fifteen pages (mostly for the student's sanity) however I'm already eight pages in and I've just gotten out of the exposition! I think we're looking at a twenty five page tale here. Hmmmmm.

Anyway here is the latest...

The roomful of medical students held their breath as Doctor Kellar gently reached down and with a practiced flick of the wrist removed the patient's skullcap. The top of the woman's head slid from the doctor's hand and struck the hardwood floor with a loud crack that echoed across the silent theater.
Doctor Kellar gasped in horror, as Mr. Groom leaned forward to get a better view.
Filling the young woman's skull was not the fleshy grey matter they had expected. Instead a series of small cogs and wheels, like one would find in a timepiece, lay before them spinning and ticking away peacefully.
Suddenly the young woman's eyes snapped open, as she looked up at the doctor with curious detachment.
Her mouth opened, and in an inhuman voice that echoed from deep within her she screamed, "Why are you tampering with my soul?!"
One of the students gasped, as the woman screamed again, "Why are you tampering with my soul?!"
Doctor Kellar leaned forward, the reflection of the mad woman's face filling his round spectacles.
"Fascinating," he whispered just before she reached out and twisted her fingers around his throat in a steel grip.


As usual...any comments or suggestions are quite welcome.